Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

At early stage of life, boys and girls would like to take an opportunity to serve to the community. In this way, they find an experience, and earn money. Some people argue that if young people serve their society without paying back it would more fruitful for both sides. I agree with the statement because experience is an invaluable asset for people who nobody learn easily.

To begin with, gaining experience is far more important than money towards the society. If teenage learn how to apply their skills and what the society needs, then they needs feel better. Because in this way they could easily reach out to their potentials. For instance, work as a volunteer in charity to help homeless people to find a shelter or if works with elder people to enjoy their time you will find an extraordinary feeling and experience. Because you will become more confident that you have something which is valuable for the community. So working without payment will lead younger people to become more generous toward their people in the community later on.

However, this kind of jobs is relatively important for teenagers to take part in the society, it is also have some downsides. Money has significant motto for teenagers. At that age, they prefer to have more independent and they are willing to have more financial freedom to do their own interest. So that if some kind job need more skills and more effort it would beneficial for teenagers to get paid by employee. In this respect, society and teenagers have gained values because teenager become more resourceful, and society has a valuable citizen.

In sum, society needs more people to help each other’s. So as a teenagers which has no financial commitment, it is better to do unpaid work to help locals as a volunteer in which teenagers will find a meaningful relationship with their community. While, in some cases, paid work is not bad idea for teenagers because it needs more effort.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 365, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'nobody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
... invaluable asset for people who nobody learn easily. To begin with, gaining exp...
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Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'need'
Suggestion: need
...s and what the society needs, then they needs feel better. Because in this way they c...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ety needs, then they needs feel better. Because in this way they could easily reach out...
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Line 9, column 106, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...to take part in the society, it is also have some downsides. Money has significant m...
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Line 13, column 68, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a teenager' or simply 'teenagers'?
Suggestion: a teenager; teenagers
...people to help each other's. So as a teenagers which has no financial commitment, it i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, then, while, for instance, kind of, in some cases, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8978978979 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56443445458 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504504504505 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1485379637 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6111111111 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298998843326 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976445318535 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586774379643 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20082531899 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427423252464 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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