Education system is introducing more academic subjects instead of exercises and sports How will it impact the children What can be done about it

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Education system is introducing more academic subjects instead of exercises and sports. How will it impact the children? What can be done about it?

It is true that the modern education system has introduced more academic subjects and added them to schools’ curriculum which would have some adverse effects on young children’s health. Governments should take steps to tackle this problem.

The lack of physical exercise will impact children in a number of different ways. Firstly, this will lead to the prevalence of obesity among children that is a result of sedentary life style. A salient example of this is the Germany that could eradicate the children’s obesity by adding more exercise and sports to their timetable in 2012. Secondly, lack of exercise increase the stress level among pupils and will cause anxiety and depression in young children. Finally, it is proved in some researches that lack of physical activities could impact the brain’s functionality and consequently affect human’s efficiency in the future.

On the other hand, there are some solutions for this scheme and governments, teachers and parents should take measures to solve the problem. Although the importance of academic subjects is clear for everyone, some academic subjects should be superseded by physical exercises. It is apparent that nowadays computer games are more appealing to children and they are reluctant to spend their time with their peers doing physical activities, so it is the schools’ responsibility to provide more sports at schools. Furthermore, schools can arrange programmes for pupils to visit the countryside which would be beneficial for their health due to the long hour walking and they will learn to respect the nature as well as the wildlife.

In conclusion, not only academic subjects such as math, literature and art, but also the exercises and sports are important and beneficial for children.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44285714286 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96037607925 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8295818578 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.3333333333 7.06120827912 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260078841609 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094972024213 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06543397162 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155458763268 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160646522291 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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