Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many young people may have the same experience that they would be asked by the representatives of employers to fill a form about their personal information, such as hobbies and interests, marital status etc. Although the interviewers think these information would be useful and helpful, most of the candidates finish such forms against their will.
Regarding to this issue, different people have different views. Some people say that personal hobbies and interest will be helpful for interviewers to select the people they want. Because the interviewers do not know these candidates and these information collected from them can be an efficient way to recognize them. However , other people have an opposite idea about that. In their opinion, personal data may be incorrect and no reference value.
I agree with the opinion that personal information will be useless. As is known to all ,everyone has their right to keep their secret, which may be destroyed when they are asked to write their private things on the form prepared by the interviewers. Furthermore, these information provided by the candidates may not be true because sometimes they are not willing to tell others. And there would probably be another condition that people will provide some information that will be helpful for them to succeed the employment as they thought. So these information may be wrong and misleading and that will cause the interviewers to make a wrong decision.
In conclusion, it is useless for the interviewers to require the candidates to provide personal information. Therefore, the interviewer just need to concentrate for other aspects of the candidates ,such as qualifications, certificate from colleges and universities, reference letters from companies, working experience and so on. That would be sufficient for them to collect the right person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...us etc. Although the interviewers think these information would be useful and helpful, most of th...
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Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...iewers do not know these candidates and these information collected from them can be an efficient...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...efficient way to recognize them. However , other people have an opposite idea abou...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tion will be useless. As is known to all ,everyone has their right to keep their s...
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Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...pared by the interviewers. Furthermore, these information provided by the candidates may not be t...
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Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...ceed the employment as they thought. So these information may be wrong and misleading and that wi...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rate for other aspects of the candidates ,such as qualifications, certificate from...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35273972603 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98798394983 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4213963249 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.2 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386865023919 0.244688304435 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141486388218 0.084324248473 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721242852621 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247962633128 0.151304729494 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539060718443 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.