Excessive consumption of sugar causes many health-related issues. Some people believe the government should control the population’s sugar intake while others think people themselves should be responsible for their sugar eating habits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The responsibility between government versus individuals to control sugar consumption levels is debatable. Some people argued that the government should be responsible to control excessive sugar intake levels in the country, while others have the opposite views and stated that it’s an individual’s call to change their habit to eat less sugary drinks. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and give evidence as to why both the government and individuals are accountable.
To start with, Advocates of government to be responsible for arguing that it’s a country's responsibility to limit the consumption level of sugar intake because the unnecessary consumption could increase the health problems in the country such as diabetes and obesity, consequently it will burden the government’s health budget. Nevertheless, they ought to restrict the sugar intake by implementing stringent laws in the country to produce sugar-free products, and violators should be imposed a hefty fine with the closure of plants to realizes their fault. Besides, the government should impose heavy taxes on sugary products in a bid to reduce sugar intake. Norway is the best example to describe, where they have imposed taxes on sugary and confectionary items, so the people could avoid to buy them, as a result, the average sugar intake level in Norway has recently been decreased from 43% to 26% per person.
On the other hand, despite these potential arguments, some people give equally convincing reasons why people are responsible for themselves. Firstly, the government doesn’t have access to monitor and change people's habits to consume less sugar by just introducing new laws to impose fines. It’s an individual’s responsibility to check the sugar content before buying the product from superstores and must understand that having a large amount of sugar would affect their body which could lead to various diseases. Therefore, they must change their lifestyle to spend a healthy life.
In conclusion, although sugar is one of the important ingredients of food; however, its excessive consumption could lead to many health problems. I am of the view that this can be controlled with the help of government by implementing laws and taxes as well as people to make them aware of its consequences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 546, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'realize'.
Suggestion: realize
...efty fine with the closure of plants to realizes their fault. Besides, the government sh...
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Line 5, column 795, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid buying'.
Suggestion: avoid buying
...onfectionary items, so the people could avoid to buy them, as a result, the average sugar in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42465753425 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0729957181 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53698630137 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.0209469793 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.307692308 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0769230769 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 7.06120827912 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.468317414725 0.244688304435 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163864261705 0.084324248473 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873474826733 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288088498251 0.151304729494 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751342973422 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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