Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Some people argue that the government should invest in public services rather that art and theatre. They argue that arts such as music and theatre are not important for a society. I believe that both arts and public services have its own place in the development of a society.
On the one hand, the government should definitely allocate a large part of its budget in public services. Spending on public services such as transportation, educational institutions and medical facilities are important for the development of a country. Investment in such facilities will improve the living condition of the citizens. For example, any country can survive without music and theatre but without a good quality hospital and adequate medicine, people will have to suffer. This is the reason why it is said that investment in public services is necessary.
On the other hand, music and theatre is not a waste of money, since they are an integral part of a society’s cultural and intellectual development and amusement. Firstly, music and theatre are the foundation of society, or it can be said as a reflection of the cultural heritage of society. So, investing in such trait cannot be claimed as wastage. Moreover, promoting more people to learn such arts will have a positive impact on people’s intelligence and reduce the stress level. Both participant and viewer will be equally benefited because recent studies have proven that music has healing capacity. Lastly, it is a means of entertainment. People spend money to watch the show, music or theatre, this way whatever money is spend can be earned back. Thus, it is not a waste of money but in reality, it is an investment which will eventually payback.
To conclude, although I agree with the fact that it is highly important for a government to invest in the public services, I also believe that art and theater is also an integral part of the society, neglecting it completely will be not advisable. In fact, I opine that there should be proper funding in both sectors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 738, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
... or theatre, this way whatever money is spend can be earned back. Thus, it is not a w...
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Line 13, column 25, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
... payback. To conclude, although I agree with the fact that it is highly important for a government...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, lastly, moreover, so, thus, for example, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01173020528 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85876076933 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466275659824 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2892142731 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9444444444 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278339508143 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899944096258 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724102763075 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168179251242 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345333600517 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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