Government investment in the arts such as music and theatre is a waste of money Government must invest this money in public services instead To what extent do you agree with this statement | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Experts throughout both the developing and developed countries have debated over the relevance of investing public funds into profitable ventures. Although it is sometimes thought that government ought not to invest in music and theatre because it is considered to be a waste, other people believe that investments into public services are more beneficial. In my opinion, I think that the government should channel more efforts into public services as they are relatively affordable and are more sought after in almost all sectors in the economy.

Firstly, every sectors of the economy are constantly in need of civil services due to its affordable rates. With capital investments to set up and equip government facilities, people are more inclined to pay less for quality services, contrary to the skyrocketing charges being imposed by private organizations. A recent article published by The Times newspaper reported that there has been a surge in the number of children in the slum who enrolled in schools throughout the federation because of the cheap tuition fees. This gives room for the entire populace, including the poor to benefit from.

Secondly, there is almost daily evidence that the inputs of most civil servants such as teachers, farmers, healthcare workers, etc are better felt, appreciated and sought after by the general masses. In other words, these civil services help to solve and provide essential and daily needs that are necessary for survival. Indigent masses especially in the countryside, for instance, rely on developmental schemes and opportunities set by the government to eradicate poverty in the economy. This is something that theatre and music cannot yield, and as such, are not of great concerns.

To recapitulate, I believe that investments in public services are extremely necessary because of its affordability and impact to the general populace.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, such as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38047138047 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88538240885 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572390572391 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5347089836 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.166666667 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23021446449 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793188191232 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653779168549 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129970171988 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382208122452 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, such as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments