The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Since the formation of the first cities people have been thinking about how to develop their place of residence and what the directions of it can be. Proceeding from this, an opinion exists that the financing community sector is crucial and it should be on the expense of spiritual life. Although in my opinion the development of the level of population culture is extremely necessary, the assistance in creating conditions for comfortable living is a priority.
On the one hand, investing money in culture allows to improve a person’s spiritual wealth, since music and theatre develop different emotions. All this makes it possible to better understand people, their relationships and feelings. Also, thanks to art, there is an opportunity to study the history of the emergence and development of society. For example, Wilhelm Wagner was a major reformer of opera, who had a significant impact on European musical culture, especially German. Hence, people's thoughts caused by listening to music and watching pictures can affect a person’s mental well-being.
On the other hand, sponsoring the improvement of people's lives is a paramount importance for the development of humanity. Without roads, schools, hospitals and other social structures, society will not be stable and successful. Only if there is a stable provision of living conditions for the population, it is possible to further develop spiritually. For instance, Maslow's pyramid of needs shows that without satisfying the lower needs, a person will not reach the level of self-actualization. Thus, governments should devote enough attention and money to create a strong public services sector.
Taking everything into consideration, it can be concluded that the sponsorship of funds by the authorities should be competent and alternate. I also believe that in the beginning it is necessary to provide conditions for existence and then the spiritual component of a person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 52, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'improving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: improving
...hand, investing money in culture allows to improve a person’s spiritual wealth, since musi...
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Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'services'' or 'service's'?
Suggestion: services'; service's
...ion and money to create a strong public services sector. Taking everything into conside...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, so, then, thus, well, for example, for instance, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41584158416 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08945091334 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594059405941 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.8980594527 49.4020404114 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.4 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125523882721 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391157820292 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564353416835 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664335854129 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307726796875 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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