The government should spend money to encourage the development of sport and art for school students rather than supporting professional sports and art performance for the general public. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant example.
It is commonly believed that instead of allocating funds on professional sports and cultural performances for the public, the authorities should provide monetary help to educational institutions as it motivates school children to be enrolled in sports and arts. I completely agree with this notion and believe that the governments should support schools and encourage students to take sports and arts.
To begin with, the expenditure to support professional athletes and cultural artists is tremendously expensive. Although they bring honor to their nation, but only a small number of people benefit from it. To illustrate my point, supporting athlete in an international games cost an arm and leg even if the chances of getting the trophy is very slim. It would be most beneficial if authorities use their money in assisting and developing infrastructures such as gym and theater stages in educational institutions as this is a sure guarantee of fun and productive experience for all students.
Furthermore, if the regime focuses more on promoting sports and arts at schools, the majority of learners will be able to develop sportsmanship and build self-confidence that can definitely help them once they graduate and start working. It will also help a number of students who are struggling with peer pressure and not so great with these subjects will divert their attention especially that they now have a place and activities to do during their leisure time.
Oh the other hand, some people justify the enormous spending on these global international events or cultural programs as an opportunity to showcase a country and its hidden talent. For instance, the London Olympic 2012, by organizing the event in immaculate manner, Great Britain significantly improve its reputation. It was an opportunity to showcase London and what they are capable of doing. Besides this, sport and arts are excellent platforms to bring people together. They facilitate global harmony.
To recapitulate, supporting professional sports and cultural performers is very expensive and not always an assurance that they will bring pride to one’s nation. It would be best to assist the young students since they hold their country’s future success.
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, so, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41193181818 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05601411992 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1891525637 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4666666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258583920524 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807443649515 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856924176086 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139694906897 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959206921915 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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