It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
There is a widespread belief that students ought to be responsible or paying full cost for their tertiary studies. While university should prioritize expenditure for students, I believe that each individual also have to provide funding for their own further education.
On the one hand, it is true that educational institutions should allocate resources to their students. Firstly, if students do not have to concern about their finantial issues, especially tuition fees, they will totally concentrate on their education and find it easy to keep up with their studies. Some deprived students these days are likely to find difficulty in earning a living and paying for their tertiary education. they are usually forced to pay off students loan and work their way through college. if this tendency continue to occur, instead of focusing on studying, thoes students will waste more time to make money and drop out of their university.
On the other hand, I also argue that parents should support their students in paying tuition fees. In terms of national budget, recently, local and national authorities have to deal with host of issues in their country, problems relating to evironment, healthcare system or industries need to be high on national agenda. Therefore, if the authorities spent more money on education and supporting universities, they have to impose spending cuts and raise more taxes to meet the need of other aspects of society. From the educational perspective, paying for their own fees can stimulate the commitment of each student. they will also try their best in order to avoid wasting their parents’ budget and falling behind with their studies.
In conclusion, it seems to me that although the university should be responsible for supporting their student’s financial background, each individual must spent more money on their education to reduce the burden of their authorities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29934210526 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78179608461 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552631578947 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9848348825 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.923076923 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0285807823178 0.244688304435 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0125103485972 0.084324248473 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0144341377007 0.0667982634062 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0211392596018 0.151304729494 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00428351402271 0.056905535591 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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