It is generally believed that some people are born with certains talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
It is clear that most people have their own talent not only in sport but also in art. While some of them agree that this capability can be inherited from their parents, I side with those who believe that it can be taught to be good at this skill by some particular person.
There are many reasons why this talent of individuals is inherited by their relatives. First, it is argued that they can receive any ability by genetics, that means these people would get a huge benefit if they had a gene which is suitable for any field. For instance, Micheal Phelps has a dominance in his arm span, so he can get a huge number of gold medals in the Olympics. Moreover, when some individuals in the parent good at a specific skill, their offspring can easily learn this trait because of observing it everyday. Take Son Heungmin as a particular example. One of the reasons which makes him become well-known comes from observing his father, who is also a legendary Korean Footballer, often play it everyday.
However, it is clear that anyone can achieve success with the right coaching. They say that many children receive a nurture from their relatives, which makes them not only have an awareness of what is right or wrong but also learn some practical skills. For example, time arrangement is one of the capability that children can learn from their parents. In addition, independence is the result of someone who has learnt any skill. When someone teaches them about the essential skill , not only do we shape our personality, but we also put our mind to its in order to be succeed. For instance, before becoming a Well-known fighter, Conor Mcgregor had worked as a plumber and he had tried hard on any workout so as pay for his living.
To conclude, It is a great debate on how talents come from nature or nurture, and some people suppose that it may come from any feature of nature. Therefore, I believe that some individuals will reach a bright career if they have an appropriate nurture.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63456090652 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50030481081 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535410764873 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8868484357 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.25 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0625 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230568672479 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689418320135 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049164617515 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148378184595 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511319949906 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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