It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Technological advancements have raised many controversial issues such as its influence on culture. Although some people consider digitalization a threat to tradition and argue that they cannot coexist peacefully, I strongly believe the opposite.
Technology not only has not damaged nations’ identity and their customs but also has played a significant role in traditional culture promotion. Firstly, with various digital devices available at hand, it has become much easier to advocate for a ritual such as Nowruz. For example, photos and movies taken from a native ceremony can reach thousands of audiences in a matter of second after posting online. Moreover, it captures the various rituals involving the tradition so that will never be lost or forgotten. Another advantage that has been provided by the Internet is a cheap and convenient way of communication to broadcast news about culture. Media used to be dominated by a limited number of powerful agencies which obviously pursued their own agenda, while broadcasting the current affairs, by putting emphasis on some events and neglecting the others. However, the net provides a cheap and efficient way to communicate different ideas about culture as everyone has a voice.
Furthermore, the technology has changed the education system for the better and as a result provided a great platform for teaching tradition to youngsters. First of all, it has made learning a more fun activity through offering teachers wide range of utilities such as 3D simulations and video games. There are quite a large number of online video games that take place in historical eras and players must learn about that period or perform special rituals in order to unlock new levels. These kind of incentives can help adolescents to learn about their culture while being entertained. Finally, online education can help a great deal of people to become more knowledgeable about their ancient history since they are accessible from every part of the country.
In conclusion, despite the belief that technology is destroying the culture, in my opinion it is helping culture to be promoted and educated. Therefore, no one should overlook the beneficial impact of technology on cultures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36079545455 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9073023066 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630681818182 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7017177492 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.9375 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.125 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193944261892 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614428562058 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605038593836 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118108080761 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403611429814 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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