Some people think that famous people can help international aid organizations to draw attention to important problems. Others believe that the celebrities can make the problems seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
With invention of social media, celebrities have gain so much attention that some people argue can have a positive effect on raising awareness of global issues such as global warming and encourage their followers to take action. However, others are of the opinion that well-known figures reduce the significance of the problems by their interference.
On the one hand, celebrities have a considerable influence on the society especially on adolescents and the commoners. Therefore, their words and actions can make a real difference. For example, the ones who are advocating for a green environment by collecting litters from mountains or replacing plastic bags with paper bags can be good role models for the ones who look up to them. Besides, prominent individuals have a lot of connections to powerful and political people that can be beneficial in several ways. Firstly, they can hold fundraisers to collect money for international aid organizations since they have both the resources and the money to do so. Secondly, they can advertise for those organizations by using their image.
On the other hand, some people believe that celebrities attention to important issues causes more damages than benefits. The notion stems from numerous posts on the internet concerning serious problems by famous actors or artists without offering a solution or aiming at any purpose. They appear like random articles scattered everywhere, on various social media. These aimless attempts not only confuse people but also make them part of their daily routine, to see species going extinct. Furthermore, it seems some famous figures talk about important issues only to build a better image for themselves without even having the slightest knowledge of what they are talking about.
In conclusion, Although some celebrities have pure intention while campaigning for good causes, their approach might not be the best one. In my opinion, they should be really cautious of their behaviors and try to help as much as they can while focusing on the problem not their fame.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, talking about, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28875379939 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79435967044 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607902735562 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6773121643 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.7333333333 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252500698608 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835714352664 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542637067153 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145546824726 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288581585642 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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