A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company.

In your letter:

describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to give advice on the decision of spending funds in our town.

First choice of sponsoring children's sports team has many benefits. The team is competent enough to bring champions trophy back home. This will definitely make our town proud. Sponsorship to this team will also encourage other children to start investing their leisure time in different sports.

On the other hand, supporting concerts in the area will also bring a few positive aspects. Our town has no entertainment or activities for spare time so concerts would allow people to feel refreshed. Open air sitting will also provide an opportunity to enjoy the pleasant weather of spring season.

In my opinion, utilizing funds for children team will be a wise decision because it would bring long term benefits to our community and a positive impact on other children as well.

I hope this letter will help you in taking the right decision.

Yours faithfully,
Ahsan Abid.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 14, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sion. Yours faithfully, Ahsan Abid.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, well, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 41.998997996 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 824.0 1615.20841683 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 163.0 315.596192385 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05521472393 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 4.20363070211 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56836224566 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 176.041082164 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.674846625767 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 506.74238477 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4440706665 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.9090909091 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8181818182 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133218385708 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484512185391 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365129734209 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0642919193285 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317695076587 0.056905535591 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 78.4519038076 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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