There is a growing sentiment that despite the increasing popularity of the amusement and recreation industry, people seem to become less creative and more disinterested in entertaining themselves. I am completely not convinced by this feeling; in fact, technological advancements open up a plethora of opportunities for entertainment that allow people to take their creativity to the next level.
First, technological progression diversifies the ways that people can entertain themselves. Twenty years ago, most people had to visit brick-and-mortar stores to buy or rent their favourite mixtapes and handle these mixtapes with extra care to keep them from getting mouldy or tangled up. Today, people can enjoy any music content with online music subscription services, such as Spotify or Apple Music, on any portable device without the fear of their favourite tunes will vanish sometime in the future. Hence, it is evident that in fact, technology enables people to engage more in-depth in entertaining themselves more than they could before.
Second, technological progression, in reality, opens up more opportunities that can let people’s creativity take wing. One noteworthy example of how technology has enriched people’s creativity is Apple Pencil, the digital pen that allows people to draw on touch-screen devices like Apple iPad. Thanks to Apple Pencil, today, artists can draw their artworks at their convenience without preparing brushes and paper or setting up easels. These artworks can be used either for recreation or even professional purposes, such as to create finely hand-crafted details that artists cannot do with the computer mouse, for their designs. This mentioned example proves that technology has indeed allowed people to dive deeper into their creativity and develop it even further.
In conclusion, technological development has reaped multiple benefits to how people relax, entertain, and stimulate their creative ability. With the ongoing advancement of technology, people have a reason to believe that their mental well-being will be further enhanced, allowing them to lead fuller, more meaningful lives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, well, as to, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6801242236 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02704557275 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605590062112 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9626696655 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.692307692 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193154318012 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789809988212 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428175072929 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124698092867 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216188158772 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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