In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
Nowadays, children try to start their working experience combining their studying with part-time job. Some people say it’s totally unacceptable and kids should spend their energy and strength for studying only. I completely disagree with this opinion and I think young charges should try to work before educational process completion due lots of reasons.
Contemporary children become more consumptive and materialistic. They tend to buy expansive clothes, gadget items visit modern clubs and list goes on and on. The opportunity of part-time job is a very good decision for them to spare parents’ money and to be busy all day long. This very important aspect in child’s growing do not let him or her to spend a lot of time playing with children. This allows to keep away them from smoking, drinking an alcohol and other harmful habits.
The second reason is that starting to work in your teens will significantly broad your horizons about wide range of specialties and by the time you need to choose a university, you will totally sure what studying program suits you better. To give a clear example, my aunt was entitled to do some volunteer job at hospital when she was 15. This helped her to understand values of medicine and she finally decided to study nursing field.
However, there some aspects parents need to control. The paid work should be related to legal work and don’t take too much time. Children should have a time for studying and if a particular job position creates obstacles for studying process, there is necessity to leave this job. The studying is priority number one for all children.
In conclusion, the possibility to have some sort of paid work for children is a very good choice and opportunity to earn their first money and understand the sense of a particular working area. However, some measures should be taken by parents to keep an education on the first place
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'keeping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: keeping
...time playing with children. This allows to keep away them from smoking, drinking an alc...
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'sort of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229281767956 0.247107183377 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.17955801105 0.155533422707 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0939226519337 0.0946595960268 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0414364640884 0.0501214627716 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.060773480663 0.0437548338989 139% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0828729281768 0.122226691241 68% => OK
Participles: 0.0386740331492 0.0403226058552 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.68283619439 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0524861878453 0.0326793684256 161% => OK
Particles: 0.00276243093923 0.00163938923432 169% => OK
Determiners: 0.0828729281768 0.0861772015684 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0193370165746 0.021408717616 90% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00552486187845 0.011925033212 46% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1925.0 1933.35771543 100% => OK
No of words: 322.0 316.048096192 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97826086957 6.12580529183 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20517956788 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335403726708 0.374742101984 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.270186335404 0.28420135186 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.201863354037 0.203846283523 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108695652174 0.137316102897 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68283619439 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.037074148 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586956521739 0.56093040696 105% => OK
Word variations: 65.4295749285 60.7387585426 108% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0891783567 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.9411764706 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9030510071 49.517814964 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.235294118 127.492653851 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9411764706 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.529411764706 0.814263465372 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 45.959810011 49.1944974215 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.24509803922 1.69124875643 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199087129654 0.332605444948 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0815507617614 0.102741220458 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0668014852048 0.0668466124924 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.518960515483 0.534860350844 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128288067113 0.148594505496 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785642616664 0.134430193775 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450419189121 0.0742795772207 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.275557553594 0.324371583561 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0337010477155 0.0638462369009 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136460364227 0.228012699653 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311557716139 0.058150111329 54% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41683366733 176% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 10.4468937876 153% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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