In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while other consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this?
In many societies young boys and girls are found to be in some kind of jobs. While some are forced to take this path because of poor economic conditions of their family, others do it willingly for fun and personal growth. In my opinion, as long as a child's right to education and play is not compromised, having a paid job will give him an early exposure into the world to master sophisticated social skills needed to lead a successful life and mature as an individual.
To begin with, in many countries children are forced into labour from an early age because of the poverty. Although they are often paid small sums for their menial jobs, it doesn't secure their future lives. moreover, they do it out of a compulsion and they seem to sacrifice the basic privileges they should get in their childhood , such as education and opportunity to make friends, for the small wages they get from doing domestic works. if this is the case, it is not a healthy practice and the government should find a way to improve their living standards so that they get their basic necessities fulfilled.
On the other hand, in many developed cultures, youngsters are enouraged to have a part-time employment if they feel it gives them opportunity to grow. if a child can involve himself in a voluntary work, there is nothing wrong if he makes money from his conscientious work. Apart from the little income, it provides him an opportunity to have a feel of things in the real world, think practically and be pragmatic about his decisions. moreover, mastering social skills becomes much easier and his interaction in the outside world allows him to build social network and personal contact. Also, one is more likely to become accountable for one's actions as unlike in the family,boss will often tend to reprimand for wrong doing or for performing on a task poorly which makes him mature fast.
In conclusion, childhood is mostly for learning new things and playing with peers. However, if children can manage both studies and work, it gives him an advantage over others to develop his personality, social circle and become more responsible in all aspects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, while, apart from, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81029810298 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63476920536 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563685636856 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.4205274847 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.785714286 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3571428571 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174554237467 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619793022901 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500438932988 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106612242141 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432799814349 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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