In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
What are your opinions on this issue?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Earning at the small age is a culture in many countries. One group of people are fully in support of this view point as they consider it as value added in the life. But, another group of people do not agree with this point of view. Before drawing my opinion, both the side will discussed further.
To begin with, children sometimes lost their focus from study as they give more important to the earning because they get the money from it. By not giving priority to the education they have to face problems in future to get success in career. Moreover, children do not have the proper understanding about the ways of spend money as a result they start the misuse of money. For instance, by lake of maturity in younger sometimes they attracted by bad habits and starts expenses on smoking.
On contrary, people have perception that getting money by working is improved the moral values in the child. At the small age, getting experience of the work becomes very helpful to understand the value of money as well as work. Also, the skill to interaction with the people improve which will be helpful when they are entered in the corporate world. Furthermore, paid work by children becomes very helpful to the families which are not financially strong. As well as characteristic of earning money at minor age creates wealthy society.
In conclusion, as per my opinion, it is good to have a quality of earning money in child which creates strong nation and supportive member in family. However, parents have to provide appropriate attention on the activities done by them so they do not ruin their study as well as do not move toward the bad habits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1356.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69204152249 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48625488326 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536332179931 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4889050858 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121579329971 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462362866798 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384456207516 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0727423784201 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504176617172 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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