Many countries have compulsory military service for men after they leave school. It would be a good idea to adopt this system, for men and possibly women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In many nations, students, especially boys, must have the obligation to join the military after their graduation. Some say that this system should be adopted internationally for people in both genders. In my opinion, I would argue that such a service should not be enforced worldwide due to several problems.
To begin with, there are reasons why governments desire young men to serve in the military. Along with the youth’s strength and stamina which usually meet the requirement of national troops, the military also gain huge benefits when recruiting these highly educated citizens. For example, young experts in computers could be of significant importance in technical positions to control the intelligent firing systems. Additionally, since young students take an incredible proportion of the population, it is understandable when governments put these individuals into the army to utilize such a human resource advantage.
However, it is not advisable to establish this system internationally because this seems to be against some students’ will and could possibly harm one’s education growth. Firstly, not every student is willing to trade off their personal purposes to participate in the troops, forcing these people to serve could be considered going against the human rights. Therefore, this system will not work in some developed countries where residents value the freedom of choice such as The United States of America. Secondly, a large portion of people still want to pursue higher education without any interruption, they are unlikely to perform productively when being forced to join the army. As a result, the defensive line still could not grow impeccably despite having enough men.
In conclusion, while compulsory military service does benefit in some parts of the world, I would disagree that all countries should adopt this system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...be against some students' will and could possibly harm one's education growth. First...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50865051903 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93878592042 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640138408304 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9637409625 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.461538462 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3076923077 7.06120827912 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267815119727 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089026865115 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662826062732 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170482031937 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650242532627 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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