In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Some think this is good, while others believe this is a problem for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Some think this is good, while others believe this is a problem for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some say that increase in population of geriatric people in many nations is beneficial, while others think that it is a trouble for the country. While older population can share their experiences with the younger generations, I believe that it can result in a major decrease in the workforce.

On the one hand, rise in number of older generation can help the nation as these people can share their invaluable life experiences with the younger populations. This is because they have lived through those situations and can better explain them and can provide knowledge about dealing with it. For example, an old ship repairer charged the ship owner 100% more money than the regular price and on asking why did he charged so high, he politely replied that it is because he exactly knew where he had to punch the nail. However, I do not agree with this as the knowledge can be gained from books and other resources given that experienced people have shared that.

On the other hand, more older people means increase in the rate of mortality and this would lead to decrease in the eligible people to work. As more and more older people die this would result in a drop in population and companies will have less people to hire. For example, in Germany, about 80% of population is above the age of 70 years and it is predicted that in 5 years the government will have to take serious steps to promote rise in population by either giving monetary benefits for reproducing or by welcoming immigrants.

In conclusion, more older people in a nation means more skills but I firmly believe that it can lead to reduction in staff for companies.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...have shared that. On the other hand, more older people means increase in the rate of mo...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...he eligible people to work. As more and more older people die this would result in a drop ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...p in population and companies will have less people to hire. For example, in Germany...
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Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...welcoming immigrants. In conclusion, more older people in a nation means more skills bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1355.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7212543554 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52735042124 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522648083624 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.6291384636 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.5 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208385008049 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970948852539 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670382341524 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139547761038 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528010930928 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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