In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Some think this is good, while others believe this is a problem for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Some think this is good, while others believe this is a problem for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Opinions differ as to whether the steady increase in the number of old people is good for society or it is causing concerning issues for many countries. In my opinion, I believe that this development could actually pose several problems.

To begin with, it is understandable why people say that the increasing number of the elderly is a good sign. One reason is that, to well-educated part of society, older generations usually have more wisdom and experiences that the young can learn from. Having more people of these ages, therefore, would build up a sizable source of knowledge to assist their successors when needed. In Vietnam, for example, many leaders of big organizations still ask for business and managing advice from their predecessors to successfully run their companies.

However, I side with those who think that a large proportion of old people will create societal and monetary issues for countries. One reason to support my standpoint is that, since the elderly lose most of their physical strength, they are prone to attacks and robberies committed by younger generations. Thus, the more individuals enter this age group, the higher crime rates may occur. For instance, it has been recently reported that robberies are committed more frequently in Vietnam, which citizens in the age of 60 or above are the main victims. Moreover, the government will have to spend an irretrievably substantial budget to support old people if this portion of the population keeps rising. Such money mostly comes from taxes, and thus, the monetary burden on national workforce will be absolutely heavier.

In conclusion, I think that the increasing number of older people will surely bring forth some serious problems for many countries around the world.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18947368421 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77697963295 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621052631579 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0572112048 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.769230769 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1538461538 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22739864566 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762803142126 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645286720226 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156089173168 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651802017985 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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