In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Some think this is good, while others believe this is a problem for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Some think this is good, while others believe this is a problem for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

At present, older people in most parts of the world are becoming larger. The increase of mature people around can give benefit because of they are more experience compared to younger ones. But some has an opposite point of view on this, they do not consider this positive because it can cause an issue.

Having older individuals is considered positive because they can contribute to the society as a good role model and good mentor. They can teach younger individuals about their well developed skills and experiences when it comes to work or personal life. Like in France, most respected and well known Chefs can be found on this country. These Chefs are mentoring Apprentice Chefs who want to learn and gain more experience to become one of the best chefs in the world. Another example is when grandparents teach good manners to their children and grand children as good citizens. Through this, older generation of people are highly contributing to the country’s growth, development, and reputation.

On the other hand, older generation can be a bad thing because it can give an impact to the country’s growth and development since most old people requires more support and care. Like most of them develop dementia which means government funds are needed. On top of that, they are retiring so they cannot contribute to any development and productivity to its country.

In my opinion, it is not negative to have more older citizens as the country benefits from there well developed skills and maturity.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: because they
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Suggestion:
...do not consider this positive because it can cause an issue. Having older in...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ration of people are highly contributing to the country's growth, developmen...
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Line 10, column 43, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
... my opinion, it is not negative to have more older citizens as the country benefits from t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, in my opinion, on the other hand, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1280.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05928853755 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69445802489 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561264822134 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.9354708667 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.4615384615 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4615384615 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159619396379 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604328724348 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452958621574 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985697322092 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409367512307 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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