Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness.To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Essay topics:

Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Many people believe that money is the key to happiness and that the more money you have the happier you become. Other people feel that having a lot of money actually causes more problems than it solves. I believe that as long as people have enough money for basic necessities such as food and a reasonable place to live, a great deal of surplus money tends to make life less rather than more content.

There are a several reasons for this. First of all, if you have a great deal of money there is no real reason to go out to work or to strive for anything. Secondly, wealthy people tend to attract the wrong sort of people. After a while, the rich start to believe that the people around them are only after one thing; having a share in their money. This makes rich people distrustful even of those good and loyal people who are their genuine friends.

Another result of having plenty of money is the fear of losing it. Rich people start to build high walls around themselves and invest in hi-tech security systems to keep out the rest of the world. They also become snobbish about whom they meet, always frightened that people without money are potential thieves or con artists.

For all these reasons I feel that having a great deal of money actually brings the opposite of happiness. It leads people to lose sight of the real sources of happiness, which often come from simple things like family life and friendship. Wealth prevents people from seeing the true value of things, only recognising what they cost.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...as long as people have enough money for basic necessities such as food and a reasonable place to ...
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Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...a while, the rich start to believe that the people around them are only after one thing; having a shar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, sort of, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1251.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59926470588 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1240679566 2.80592935109 76% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569852941176 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7432487204 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3571428571 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0582469913306 0.244688304435 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0263173692575 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298082717497 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.039744903298 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305540954657 0.056905535591 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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