Many crimes are often related to the consumption of alcohol. Some people think that the best way to reduce the crime rate is to ban alcohol. Do you think this is an effective measure against crime? What other solutions can you suggest?
Abusing alcohol has often lead to several crimes. Many believe that stop selling alcohol will decrease the number of crime. The primary problem with drinking spirits is aggression which often ends with violence and crime due to that the most viable solution is to prohibit selling alcohol.
Drinking alcohol has become a big social problem and sadly there is a large number of crime that has been committed while people were drunk. This happens because of overconsumption of spirits that many people do not control and is possibly leading them unknowingly to black outs. Black outs are the moments when people are awake but do not have any glue what is going on and they will not remember this moment later in their lives. That is the worse stadium and will be probably the peak time when people commit different crimes including domestic violence. The result of this are broken families and suffering children. For example, in 2004 a survey about domestic violence in Russia, 77% of offenders were raising their hands towards family members because they were drunk. This shows there are serious problems which needs an immediate solution.
To tackle this problem is to prohibit selling spirits and send alcohol addicts to rehabilitation centres where they can get rid of alcoholism. Banning alcohol would cut down the crime level and decrease the violence and aggression that it causes. In solution to that, it would help if we educate people more about the dangers and promote influencive advertisements to encourage people to alienate from drinking. To support addicts we need to encourage them to go to rehabilitation to get help. To think about the influencers the most power has media, so for instance, if we promote in radio and television that alcohol is an addiction and brings more trouble than benefits as well as violence and depression, then people will think more and it will develop a new viewpoint of alcohol.
In conclusion, alcohol is a problem and strongly connected with violence, to prevent this we need to ban spirits and show advertisements about the dangers. In my opinion, this will make our society better and safer place to live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'leaded', 'led'.
Suggestion: leaded; led
Abusing alcohol has often lead to several crimes. Many believe that st...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...a big social problem and sadly there is a large number of crime that has been committed while peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0055401662 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.570663984 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529085872576 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2659281562 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.294117647 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262795714859 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084417818612 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524610330427 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158475604816 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523222257907 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.