Many famous sports players advertise sports products Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

Essay topics:

Many famous sports players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

There is an emerging trend to advertise sports goods through sportsmen. Even though sometimes athletes promote toxic substances to enhance the performance which have countless lethal effects on body, the assets outscore the prejudices as these advertisements motivate people to actively participate in sports.

In order to boost the turnover, the manufactures hire sportsmen in commercials to advertise their products. Some sports person compromise with their ethics and proffer the individuals to buy fatal chemical substances just to ameliorate their performance. These materials includes antibiotics and steroids which intensify the performance by unnatural ways and welcomes several life threatening Diseases. Also, it is biased to overlook the fact stated by American Health Society that adverts regarding stamina booster products such as proteins have several negative impacts on body of young people.

Since the players have quite large fan base, thus their promotional activities have long lasting effects on the minds of people. Seemingly, through their advert of sports products, they inspire the public to indulge in sports to get rid of sedentary lifestyle. Consequently, they avid spectators fanatically adopt the instructions of their favorite sportsman to make healthy. To exemplify, as per the facts documented by WHO that in India, adverts of cricket bats by a renowned cricketer motivates youngsters to take part in crickets.

In conclusion, although advertisements by sports personality allure the public towards perilous products Which adversely effects their bodies, these adverts invariably encourage them to lead healthy life . I believe that inevitable merits of these commercials overshadowed the demerits.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, look, regarding, so, thus, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.90118577075 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99313337787 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664031620553 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5799765307 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.416666667 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0833333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147635418715 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544196878174 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593232215161 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935985143556 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148842292456 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.94 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.73 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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