Many magazines have pictures of famous people on holiday or with their families.
Is it acceptable for famous people to have less privacy than other people?
Many think that personal life of well-known people might be violated . Although the stated viewpoint is widespread, I disagree with it due to reasons which now be discussed.
Primarily, having privacy is basic psychological need of a human being. Although we are social creatures, some psychologists have proved that we need a certain degree of privacy to maintain our mental and physical health. In fact, research which was conducted on such social animals as rats and chimps has decisively showcased that constant exposure to the observer has an adverse effect on the overall health condition of the objects.
Secondly , prominent individuals are citizens ; thus, they have a right to have their personal life, and the law protects this right. In other words, the law does not have a distinction between celebrities and nonfamous people . Consequently, violation of the law is punishable and reproachable.
Finally, some might state that privacy is a price to be paid for being famous. That when a person becomes popular, their personal automatically matters become interesting to the public; thus, this interest ought to be satisfied. I might have agreed if a person had a control over this process and could reveal or close his private life from the public but because it does not depend on him or her it is wrong.
To sum up, famous people should not be deprived of their personal life because violation of privacy may have negative health consequences. Moreover, it is illegal as well
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 245 250 //Minimum 250 words wanted. You will get a very low mark if it is less than 250 words.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 245 250
No. of Characters: 1210 1200
No. of Different Words: 147 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.956 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.939 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.029 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.635 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...quences. Moreover, it is illegal as well
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in fact, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12653061224 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83183509609 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628571428571 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0945850928 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6153846154 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8461538462 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84615384615 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245978059557 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845394175379 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796821520601 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138114289109 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614559389456 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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