Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree?
Young people mostly view celebrities as iconic figure and they tend to imitate their lifestyles . Greater number of people believe the media attention given to celebrities has adverse effects on children. I completely agree with this opinion because the unnecessary coverage given to celebrities affects the children's buying behaviour and morale attitude
Most today's celebrities have attitudinal problems; they do not live good exemplary life. Unethical behaviors such as drinking and smoking in the public, and other social vices are common among the stars. Naira Marley is a typical example of celebrity who receives wider media coverage, and whose music contents and behaviour could affect the children's attitude. Naira Marley has flagrantly flouted laws on many occasions. Thus, if such celebrity with unacceptable behaviour continues to receive media attention, the children would see his behaviour and lifestyle as the most glamorous thing to do and they would tend to imitate them.
In addition, the corporate firms are fond of using celebrities on television adverts in the recent times. It is believed that this promotional means has psychological effect on the children as it affects their buying behaviour and create unreal needs for them. For example, an article published in Journal of Consumer Psychology shows that there is significant positive relationship between celebrities endorsement and children's buying behaviour. It also shows that celebrity endorsement for companies' products advertisement are mainly targeted at the children. Thus, it entirely necessary to protect the interest of this most susceptible segment of the society from unhealthy advertisement targeted at them.
In conclusion, I believe media coverage given to celebrities affect children psychologically and morally, thus , media attention should be completely shifted to something that will greatly benefit the children .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.76408450704 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95190847982 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591549295775 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6118879935 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.923076923 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8461538462 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302211235355 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10564235392 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858033331069 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196579910783 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654835078878 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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