Many people today spend most of their free time at home watching TV series or movies instead of going out Do you think this is right or wrong

Essay topics:

Many people today spend most of their free time at home watching TV series or movies instead of going out. Do you think this is right or wrong?

In this modern era, not only the majority of people have attracted by entertainment indusry but also became lazy and has been following sedentary lifestyle. While a large number of people utilise their time by watching TV dramas and films instead of wondering outside, other active people would like to do extensive exercise and developing new skill. I concure that this has a negative impact on humans.
To initiate with, the prominent demerit is, due to such series and films people divert their focus from their health and become less active in terms of physical activity. Moreover, for extensive hours, people would like to watch such shows and even do not note their gaining body. For instance, a recent survey was conducted by the Times of India in my area and they declared that out of sixty people only nine persons were conscious about their health. Eventually, these shows make you faty.
Making fewer friends in own surrounding is another major disadvantage. If people will not go out, they will not make new friends and like this, they will limit their friend circle. Unless you do not make new relations, you cannot get a broader perspective. For example, my neighbour who watches in numerous web series and films has countable friends. Ultimately, sitting at home makes you a less known person in your area.
In conclusion, although you can get immense pleasure by watching TV shows and films, you cannot be either a healthier or active member of your area. According to me, it had better people go outside and wander their surrounding while making new connections.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...en following sedentary lifestyle. While a large number of people utilise their time by watching T...
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Line 4, column 149, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...ealthier or active member of your area. According to me, it had better people go outside and wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93632958801 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4954334143 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621722846442 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0935348048 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1428571429 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280751510522 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08788465858 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434114054659 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168149691336 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172687448493 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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