In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned
substances to improve their performance.
What are the causes of the phenomenon and what are some of the possible solutions?
Undoubtedly, there is an escalating count of sportsmen who are consuming the steroids to ameliorate their performance at sports events. Even though proliferated stiff competition provokes them to use the illegal medical drug to perform outstanding, still promotion of healthy competitions by the authorities would bring this menace under absolute control.
Since the insane thirst to win the sports tournaments build up undue pressure on the minds of athletes, thus they start using these drugs to intensify their output. Seemingly, in order to attain name and fame, sponsors supply drugs to their sportsmen to consume . Also It is biased to overlook the fact documented by WHO that in the common
wealth games, Chinese regimes endowed the steroids to their sportsmen to win the gold in running competitions. Therefore, mainstreaming the sense of pride and neglecting the other concerns by sports organisation would motivate the candidates to use these toxic substances.
Probing to next question, the supremacy should aware the players about the relevance of healthy competitions. The real aims of sports should be to promote the amicable relationships, enhance the team work and cordial environment, instill the moral value and alleviate the ego. To exemplify, as per the report published by Canadian Sports Council, in the gone calendar year, owing to educative campaigns the athletes have heeded to appeal of authorities and shunned the usage of lethal supplements . Henceforth, informational campaigns are imperative to maintain the dignity of sports and inculcate the spirit of true sportsmanship.
In conclusion, although aspiration to win the competition among players force them to use lethal substances, a promotion of healthy competition under the auspices of sports authority would get acquaint them regarding the real motto of sports in life.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...dical drug to perform outstanding, still promotion of healthy competitions by the...
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... order to attain name and fame, sponsors supply drugs to their sportsmen to consu...
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...pply drugs to their sportsmen to consume . Also It is biased to overlook the fact ...
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...y drugs to their sportsmen to consume . Also It is biased to overlook the fact docum...
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...roids to their sportsmen to win the gold in running competitions. Therefore, main...
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...ganisation would motivate the candidates to use these toxic substances. Probin...
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... shunned the usage of lethal supplements . Henceforth, informational campaigns are...
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...rding the real motto of sports in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55438596491 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04159032684 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610526315789 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0430987462 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.909090909 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131450089517 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484280385572 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323495682919 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717378645819 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199341806301 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dical drug to perform outstanding, still promotion of healthy competitions by the...
^^
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... order to attain name and fame, sponsors supply drugs to their sportsmen to consu...
^^
Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...pply drugs to their sportsmen to consume . Also It is biased to overlook the fact ...
^^
Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...y drugs to their sportsmen to consume . Also It is biased to overlook the fact docum...
^^^^
Line 4, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...roids to their sportsmen to win the gold in running competitions. Therefore, main...
^^
Line 4, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ganisation would motivate the candidates to use these toxic substances. Probin...
^^
Line 6, column 497, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... shunned the usage of lethal supplements . Henceforth, informational campaigns are...
^^
Line 8, column 252, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rding the real motto of sports in life.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, look, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55438596491 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04159032684 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610526315789 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0430987462 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.909090909 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131450089517 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484280385572 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323495682919 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717378645819 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199341806301 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.