Many teenagers now have their own smartphone. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, having personal smartphones is very common for many adolescents. While iPhones and other devices can empower teenager's safety, I believe that overuse of such gadgets results in distraction at the time of their study.
The main advantage to owning a smartphone, when a person is young, is that it constantly monitors the location of young people through the cutting-edge technology of GPS. This location data is programed to be shared with their parents who can get assured of their safety. For example, there are numerous applications available in a smartphone for parents to download the feeds of the location data of their children's smartphones. Additionally, with the help of smartphones teenagers can also mitigate the risk of the emergency by dialling 911 when they see any sign of danger. This enables them to be in the safe hands of police officials in no time. Despite this, I believe that these devices provoke the scenario of losing concentration for teenagers while they study.
Overusing smartphones for an extended period of time means that children involve very little in the study. The other minute, the notification rings out from such devices and young people get addicted to checking the notifications every time they ring. This leads to poor outcomes of the education system even after spending huge amount of budget on this sector by the government. For example, in one study of Oxford University, it has been reported that the children are now 20% more likely to fail in their study than kids 20 years ago since they are now able to carry their own mobile phones. I believe that this makes overconsumption of smartphones dangerous and they should be used in moderation.
In conclusion, although smartphones can help children improve their safety, they also prevent them from keeping enough concentration while studying and they should, therefore, only be used sparingly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21033210332 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81495886465 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583025830258 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1100014176 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.666666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219676602456 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776328689679 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408054575753 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12691479973 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477016234046 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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