Money should be spent on creating new buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Money should be spent on creating new buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important to consider whether the government should invest the tax payer's money on renovating the traditional buildings or constructing modern infrastructure. I strongly support the former view, in my perspective restoration of existing buildings is vital because these monuments not only represent the culture and heritage of the nation but also promote tourism.

To begin with, it is quintessential for the government to spend money on the renovation of the old museums, temples and building, owing to the heritage value of these buildings. In other words, most of the ancient monuments were built by our ancestors which represent the uniqueness of ethnic values of the community and connect the society to the rich tradition. The UNESCO World Heritage site, the Ajanta and Ellora caves in India, serve the best example of the monuments which act as the epitome of cultural and religious heritage. Therefore, if these buildings are not maintained, then our future generation will possibly lose touch with history.

Additionally, my viewpoint is further bolstered by the reason that the maintenance of ancient buildings leads to the promotion of tourism. The reason for this is these monuments always attract the tourists from different countries and maintaining them will add icing on the cake, as a result, a surge in tourists will lead to the economic development of the host country. For instance, 40% of the gross economy is dependent on tourism, in that situation renovation and preservation of ancient tourist places is extremely important.

In conclusion, although renovation and restoration involve a substantial amount of money, in my view, it is more beneficial in comparison to the construction of new ones in terms of preserving the nation's ethnicity and promoting national tourism.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
... of new ones in terms of preserving the nations ethnicity and promoting national touris...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my view, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37894736842 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04214775664 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582456140351 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0078939169 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.3 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0937397859612 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038963923762 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368011662697 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0626703852693 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354805411115 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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