Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. What do you think is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative development?
Owing to the proliferation of sedentary work and personal lives, people hardly get free time. The majority of young people consider shopping as the best way to spend their free time. Shopping has now become the latest leisure activity among the youngsters due to the availability of varieties of products at cheap rates and attractive advertisement of the items. In my opinion, this is a negative development as it can cause wastage of time and money.
To embark on, the exaggeration of import and export has boomed the local markets with a variety of products which are mostly the replicas of well-known brands, considerably at low rates. Therefore, everyone feels contented to purchase something to earn happiness for themselves or for their acquaintances. Secondly, people usually get attracted toward the glorifying display of products on a television screen or on the hoardings which obligates them to buy it. Moreover,
advertisements also play an indispensable role in the popularity of items and the display of discounts on its sale. To exemplify, a study has revealed that 60% of the customers get attracted to the product with discounts and spend money on shopping.
Further, shopping has detrimental effects as it leads to the wastage of prestigious time and money which can otherwise be consumed in some productive work. For instance, according to a survey, 60% of the people visiting in the shopping malls, shop only for contentment while only 20% actually, shop for urgent requirements. Thus, activities such as pursuing hobbies, playing sports or visiting dear and near ones can be performed as leisure activities.
To reiterate, although the accessibility of products and its attractive adverts have made shopping popular among young people, however, this is a negative approach in terms of the wastage of time and money. Thus, leisure activity needs to be more productive and effective.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2614379085 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00033461047 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562091503268 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4348808807 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212716867542 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678075645582 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563917402087 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11009464204 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573957851937 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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