More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Essay topics:

More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Is it noteworthy that as of right now, numerous species of animals have their numbers declining at drastic rates. In recent years, there has been an upsurge in poaching and illegal trafficking of animal parts. Namely rhino horns, elephant tusks and pangolin scales. These activities have been driven by the increasing demand, where China is the biggest consumer market for such products.

In fact in Singapore, as early as in July this year, there was a large shipment of Elephant tusks and Pangolin seized. Most of these animals have been hunted and exploited for their body parts. Some animals are even left to bleed to death after hunters chop off what they want. The ivory from the tusks are often carved into ornaments and jewellery. Furthermore, these items have become increasingly common for use as a status symbol to display success and wealth. Rhino horns and Pangolin scales are also demand in the Asian market as they are being used in traditional Chinese medicine, despite no proven medicinal benefit from their use.

There is no doubt that human impact is the key factor contributing to make the situation worse. Therefore, raising awareness of people is the wisest and most sustainable solution in this urgent circumstance. Wildlife organisations could raise campaigns to encourage people to stay away from the luxurious goods that are made from animal parts and opt for artificial ones instead. The government could also implement more stringent laws and heftier fines on illegal trafficking of animal parts. They could also provide more funding for nature reserves and wildlife sanctuaries, who will take in some of the wounded animals to nurse them back to full fitness before releasing them in the wild again.

In conclusion, human activities are a main cause of animals nearing extinction. But, by following the above methods, I believe we would see a decline in poaching activities as well as the number of these animal species who will be able to roam freely again.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Namely,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07598784195 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54720313801 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601823708207 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1032121426 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2352941176 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3529411765 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157190988256 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427849305506 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307459034034 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0827617784487 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364172551176 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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