Most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the government in order for them to continue with their work.
To what extent do you agree?
While numerous artists draw a meagre monthly income, government should provide financial aid to ensure they meet their basic necessities of life. Although there are other domains like healthcare which needs concentrated funding, I feel the field of arts and artists are in need of monetary assistance.
Considering firstly the healthcare sector, majority of the third world countries are lacking basic medical facilities. To improve this situation, government of such countries should concentrate on construction of good hospitals and initiating medical schemes, which occupy a major portion yearly financial budget allocation. Furthermore, education sector is one more crucial part of any country, and most often underdeveloped countries do not have good infrastructure for schools and colleges. The government should improve this situation by providing adequate resources. Therefore, healthcare and education should be the priority of a country, which is economically backward.
However, arts is one such domain that cannot be neglected. This is because art and artists depict local culture through their work. As a result, this brings identity to a community or a country, thereby taking pride in claiming that we belong to a certain culture. Moreover, government should encourage and promote artists due to the fact that it is slowly diminishing. If government authorities do not take responsibilities, there will be a day when people cannot related to their cultural background. Hence, government should provide funding to artists in terms of salaries, conducting exhibitions to promote local art, and creating awareness campaigns to bring glory back to art that it richly deserves.
In conclusion, from my perspective, healthcare and education are two main pillars of a country's economy, but art is equally important as it represents a unique culture and brings identity to people. Thus, government should allocate a separate budget to provide financial back-up to artists and thereby protecting the field of arts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...financial aid to ensure they meet their basic necessities of life. Although there are other domai...
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Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs concentrated" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'concentrating' or 'to be concentrated'.
Suggestion: concentrating; to be concentrated
...her domains like healthcare which needs concentrated funding, I feel the field of arts and a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, third, thus, while, i feel, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6339869281 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06453017755 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591503267974 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1292464915 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.933333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.86666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168149595261 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581659394976 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401436093334 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982376876769 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244094646785 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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