Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
With the advent of groundbreaking media technologies, celebrities have become more famous around the world. It is assumed that their fashion trends and luxury lifestyles are more appealing towards youngsters than their success in the area of work. I partially agree with the assertion as fascination comes along with some remarkable milestones.
TV programs, commercial and social media has made celebrities’ appearance easy for their fans. People can follow their fashion and dream living in routine life using high technologies smartphone. Consequently, the public spends a lot of time under the influence of their favorite TV stars and gets inspired by their extremely luxurious lifestyle. Lionel Messi, Tom Cruise, and Angelina Jolie, for instance, are exceptionally famous, worldwide. Their life is always under the shadow of the limelight. Therefore, they have a huge fan base due to high media coverage. Glamour, however, is not the only reason being charming for them as people also admire their hard work to achieve success.
On a further note, most people are struggling in their life and they find these celebrities as inspiration. The life of famous people is revealed to everyone due to media coverage and people observe their atrocious nightmares. Subsequently, people appraise them for their life achievements along with glamourous life. A rather illustrative example is Shah Rukh Khan, who was an outsider in the Bollywood industry and went through many ups and down to become India’s most famous celebrity. People love the way, he made an immense effort and dedication to become a first-class actor.
The conclusion to be drawn is that, undoubtedly, media has enhanced the power of glamour, but it is not the only reason for celebrities’ popularity. Admirers see their success stories as motivation and get inspiration to change own life. Because fans want to be like their favorite stars.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 472, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...any ups and down to become India’s most famous celebrity. People love the way, he made an immens...
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Line 7, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and get inspiration to change own life. Because fans want to be like their favorite sta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3498349835 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92370871139 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610561056106 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9006946788 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0555555556 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322264172573 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100801361424 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586955603224 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193095078411 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426733315949 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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