Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that is happening.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In recent years, advances in technology have allowed government, the police and privately owned companies to keep the public under constant surveillance. Not always citizens can imagine that their movements and cellphone calls are watched and listened. I consider that this development can bring about more problems for people compared any advantages it might bring.
Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of monitoring by security cameras and tracking cellphones. In areas where there a high crime rate, the use of security cameras may act as a deterrent to criminals: if they can see a camera, they may think twice about breaking into building or stealing a car. If a crime is carried out, then a camera may provide useful evidences. The same is true for a cellphone the police sometimes rely on call logs to help them trace whereabouts of suspects or victims.
Nevertheless, despite the advantages above, I believe people could face serious drawbacks from being monitored. One potentially dangerous problem is that in countries where human rights are ignored, the use of security cameras or listening devices may be harmful to society. People should be able to hold meetings and express their opinions without being invaded. Another obvious issue is that nowadays many people upload personal information and photographs onto social networking sites. They often do not realize how easy it is for other people to view this information or for the criminals to use the data or photographs for their own financial gain.
In conclusion, it seems inevitably that there will be more and more ways to monitor society in the future. However, it is evident that human freedom outweighs any of the minor benefits that could results people being monitored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...hs any of the minor benefits that could results people being monitored.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18309859155 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72519743347 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62323943662 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3891709195 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.142857143 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92857142857 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336276048552 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968283263116 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449930132103 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167263737364 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743300472282 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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