One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of the outweigh the disadvantages?
There is no doubt that better medical care has added many benefits to people life. Improved medical care has lightened the lamp of living longer in the heart of many of us. However, I believe that it has summed up more disadvantages to society.
To begin with, high-end technology used in medical care are providing better facilities and cures to patients because of which they are living longer. However, it is one of the reasons for the lowering of mortality rate and hence, increasing population. Due to overpopulation in our society youth are not getting placed at their right age in life. There is more demand for experience holders than freshers; which leads to an increase in unemployment.
Moreover, medically unfit or old age people cannot contribute to society in major forms due to lack of energy or health reasons. They live on medical care for the long term and therefore, it's difficult for them to take part in social causes.
For example, according to the data published in the Indian newspaper TOI, the voluntary participants in India at the time of the COVID-19 pandemic spread from the period between April-20 to June-20 were youngsters aged between 25 to 35. Mostly, these age group people are free from illness and full of enthusiasm owing to their good immune and no medical dependency.
Secondly, nowadays the young generation is themselves occupied in raising their children and family. In such cases, children do not have time to take care of their parents, which is increasing the disappointment and mental illness in old people.
Additionally, old people are witnessing the disappearance of traditional culture in a young generation which makes a family impossible to live together due to the cultural gap.
For instance, Old-age firms are rapidly increasing in numbers and parents prefer to stay there owing to no attention from their children. It again adds a burden to society.
To conclude, I firmly agree that improved medical care has helped us to make this place a better world. An increase in life expectancy has given old people to see their growing juveniles and grandchildren doing good in their life. However, it has contributed many negative consequences as well namely, overpopulation, low mortality rate, unemployment and many more, which overweight its advantages.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, no doubt, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12137203166 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8443418624 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55672823219 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9681322355 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.157894737 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9473684211 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270938181329 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796910657244 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670875948773 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117384084662 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826720409123 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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