Parents want to achieve balance between family and career but only a few manage to achieve it. What do you think is the reason? Discuss possible solution and provide example?
The cost of living has increasingly risen in recent years. So couples would need to make more effort to make more money to ease their situation. As a result, most of them haven’t found a chance to make work-life balance. In fact, few parents would find how to tackle this solution. In this essay, I will outline why expenses and the nature of work impact on people’s life. There after I provide practical solution for alleviating this problem for families.
The most concern of families, nowadays, are expenses. Although food, education, healthcare have become more accessible, it is still not affordable for the majority. Higher Education is not free in many countries. In fact, more people tend to get a higher degree to boost their chance in the market. Even if, in some countries, the student could obtain a loan from the government, but it is not available for everybody. If a student has some certain of qualification, then it will be eligible for the scholarship. For instance, one college student needs to pay 8000 Canadian dollars annually to register in college, which is a considerable amount for the average family. So this reason cause that parents work hard to facilitate their children life, particularly education cost.
The second reason which makes impossible for the people to smooth their work and life accordingly is the nature of work. If people work in the construction industry, it would need to work at the project site, which is usually far from the cities. Or, if they work as a maintenance technician, they need to be available twenty-four hours because the employer needs them if an emergency happened. So that they sell their time to the owner of the company. Thereby, they haven’t had a right to leave their work whenever they want. As a result, it is meaningless for them to have a life with the family, and sadly, they marry with their job.
However, the internet has changed the nature of job drastically. There are numerous ways provided by this technology. For instance, online shopping become popular among people, especially the young generation. Internet leads people to find a solution to sell their product or services throughout the web. As a matter of fact, the government also put a lot of investment to make a digital city for their inhabitants. So, it seems to be that the internet could resolve the issue for people’s who are interested in more freedom.
In sum, the cost of living, and the traditional ways of working are the facts which people understand. So they still struggle to find a way to balance their time. By the way, the internet has raised a lot of opportunity for people who would like to take up this opportunity and shift their fixed work time to more flexible hours which they give them more freedom to spend their time with families.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: Thereafter
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Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er needs them if an emergency happened. So that they sell their time to the owner of th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, second, so, still, then, for instance, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2349.0 1615.20841683 145% => OK
No of words: 482.0 315.596192385 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8734439834 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74656201448 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497925311203 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 506.74238477 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 9.0 2.10420841683 428% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1027149251 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6206896552 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44827586207 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 3.4128256513 322% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0355020851526 0.244688304435 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0127174474953 0.084324248473 15% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0224278229359 0.0667982634062 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0236555941837 0.151304729494 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0125509519451 0.056905535591 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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