The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

Essay topics:

The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.

Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

A huge increase of obesity in young people has been noticed in the past 10 years specially in the Western countries. Knowing that obesity is a leading cause of mortality in the world, a clear study for the reasons and the resulting consequences for this issue is crucial.

In fact, there are many reasons for gaining weight in youngsters. Firstly, the sedentary life style that almost half the population is facing due to the technology advance. For instance, Teenagers would rather prefer to spend the majority of their time surfing the internet and playing games instead of performing any physical exercise like jogging or biking. Secondly, ingesting high amount of fatty food plays also an important role because in those days most of our mothers are working and they don’t have enough time to cook so they would rather prefer to order ready food or to prepare some easy recipes such as Burgers or Pizza.

Consequently, there are a lot of resulting effects. Starting with health related problems, it is well-known that overweight teenagers may develop many diseases such as diabetes, cardiovascular events and dyslipidemia .Recent studies conducted in youth people has shown a direct link between insulin resistance and obesity. Moving on the physical performance, most of obese teenagers will not be able to do regular exercises since they will feel tired directly. Furthermore, such people are not able to take part in any football or basketball game for the same reasons stated above.

To sum up, the percentage of obese children is increasing dramatically especially in those recent years therefore analyzing the causes and the consequences is very important to come up with possible solutions.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, in fact, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23826714801 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76493761816 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646209386282 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.962111243 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.909090909 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1818181818 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5454545455 7.06120827912 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0804954732285 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0279132120813 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368254039185 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0580254118852 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449595082369 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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