Prevention is better than cure."
Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
"Prevention is better than cure", a saying that everyone agrees with, yet no one actually follows. People from diverse communities tend to think that prevention would cost money, which is somehow true, however, it is not wasted money as they think. As a matter of fact, treatment will cost even more money and time and not to mention effort.
The main reason for most people's thought, originates from the lack of knowledge, to be specific absence of proper health education. I strongly believe that health education is one of the most important roles of governments. A large proportion out of a country's health budget, should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. Immense amount of money is spent on building hospitals and refurbishing it with the latest equipment, in addition to drug industry. However, if the same amount is spent on developing multiple health education programs, directed to people of different ages, not only children at schools, that would have eventually decreased the rate of sicknesses and epidemic diseases.
As an example, people usually ignore visiting the dentist for teeth check-up. A survey made by a group of dentists in my neighborhood, showed that ninety percent of people avoided walking in a dental clinic except when they felt a severe toothache. Various reasons lied behind this, mainly fear of pain and money-wise. Although it costs even more to treat than to prevent, but still people would not believe it. The dentists concluded that the actual reason was the lack of knowledge and absence of oral health education. They created a simple educational video about proper oral hygiene measures, and that visiting a dentist every six months, is one of those measures. The video was played on a large screen in the main park every Saturday and Sunday. After the first week, the rate of people visiting dentists for dental check-up, increased by sixty percent.
Based on that experiment, a large proportion out of every country's health budget, should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures in all fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...survey made by a group of dentists in my neighborhood, showed that ninety percent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, so, still, in addition, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20402298851 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74119707098 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548850574713 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1236252978 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.529411765 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58823529412 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335469294792 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109371926657 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167621155314 0.0667982634062 251% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249138189876 0.151304729494 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154472745108 0.056905535591 271% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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