The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this.To what extent do you agree?

Essay topics:

The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this.
To what extent do you agree?

In many countries majority of the governments’ budget is spent for treat sick people. I believe that the prevention is more important of healing. I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs below.
This is a fact that the prevention is cheaper than the treatment. We know that all sick people that are in their treatment’s process must spend much money. For instance, women having developed breast cancer while must suffer many psychological issues, must spend all their saved money. But, if a national program will be made by governments to check all country’s women to diagnose cancer, it can help all women to have a happy life. Now, in developed countries there are many national health programs that encourages people to check their health in free of charge that we can say this is a saving money program for the mentioned governments. Because, based on research that have been done, the money that governments pay for a sick person can be pay for checking 15 persons.
Illness has many psychological problems that can involve patient’s families too. This is a fact that majority of patients suffer mental issues because of their illness. For instance, when person become blind because of a developed diabetes, we can imagine how much they will suffer from their disability and there are statistics about number of suicide that happen by disabled persons. However, diabetes is a sickness can be controlled by some simple instruction that can be learned by governments to people. So, if governments teach people to control their lifestyle or have a healthy lifestyle it can prevent of many sicknesses.
In conclusion, I agree with this sentence that the prevention is more important than treatment and this is governments’ responsibilities to improve their health system and focus their system to prevention instead of treatment.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
In many countries majority of the governments' budge...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18481848185 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03793183493 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50495049505 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5268129761 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.733333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73333333333 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173881856399 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746074614728 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904697495774 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141162148717 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0968121159141 0.056905535591 170% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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