You work in a busy but poorly organised office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department.Write a letter to your employer. In the letter ask to be considered for this job explain why you would b

Essay topics:

You work in a busy but poorly organised office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department.

Write a letter to your employer. In the letter

ask to be considered for this job
explain why you would be a suitable candidate
outline the current problems and the changes you would like to make

Dear Mr Green

It is now three years since I joined this company and while I find my current position of administrative assistant very rewarding, I feel I am ready to take on a more challenging role. I would therefore like to apply for the position of office supervisor.

I have qualifications in business management and I have over ten years’ experience working in this industry. I have also recently taken a course in team leadership. During my time here I have been responsible for instigating several new systems. As you are aware, many of the operating systems we currently use are outdated and are inadequate for dealing with the large number of customers we now have. If I were given the opportunity to manage this area then I would plan to gradually update these systems so that the office can run more smoothly.

I am enthusiastic and energetic employee and I feel that I am well qualified for this role.

I would be grateful if you could consider me for this position.

Yours sincerely

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s; experience working in this industry. I have also recently taken a course in te...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 841.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80571428571 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94844960989 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.657142857143 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 282.6 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4584597563 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4444444444 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 4.34317383033 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231866797059 0.216113520407 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970085162396 0.0766984524023 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826838237107 0.0603063233224 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140642629183 0.12726935374 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903573767756 0.0580467560999 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.