In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?
Equality has been and is still one of the most debated topics around the world. Nowadays, people have different beliefs. Whereas some stress upon the importance of equal rights and opportunities, others think that personal achievement solely depends upon an individual’s traits. This essay supports the former view as egalitarian society creates a conducive environment for people to achieve more.
People arguing only about personal merits have a strong argument. They argue that if a person has unique abilities and has great potential, no matter what the circumstances are they will rise above. It is easy to understand why they have faith in this assertion, according to them, unique abilities can never get unnoticed and would make anyone successful. However, I disagree with this assertion since it is not a valid argument. To cite an example of a major flaw in this notion one has to consider the example of MTV’s broadcasting policies in the early 80s. During that era, black artists’ music was never broadcasted by the channel despite having an amazing voice or talent. Therefore, just by having talent and potential one cannot achieve success in this world.
Nevertheless, other, including myself, believe that equality and success complement each other. In other words, both are directly proportional to each other. When everyone is given equal opportunities, for instance, education, jobs and training, the probability of being successful is usually on the higher side. For instance, even though I was a software developer, my employer gave me an opportunity to explore the marketing domain. Owing to which, now I am working as an Area Sales Manager along with handling some duties of the I.T department as well. Therefore, in a society that gives fair opportunities and rights to everyone chances of personal success are often on the bright side because of the positivity of such environment.
To conclude, equality is a driving factor in order to achieve success in one’s academic or professional life, and they go hand in hand. Undoubtedly, fair opportunities for all can transform people’s life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, well, whereas, as to, for instance, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27352941176 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91176322044 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623529411765 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0226641845 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3684210526 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8947368421 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234182074477 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637364506543 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604606038397 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14438589748 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847359022685 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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