Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.
Which you consider to be the major influence?
Humans are differentiated from each other in terms of both appearance and personality. While research demonstrates that genes have an impact on our type of personality and improvements, I personally agree with the idea of our interactions with the environment play a more important role in our life.
On the one hand, there is no doubt that we are born with a unique genetic blueprint which shapes the basic characteristics of our personality as well as our physical health and appearance. Some people are born creative, some others brave, some are born neurotic or merry and cheery. We inherited our genes and therefore we are not able to manipulate them. Most of these traits can develop and become noticeable as we grow up. So some experts claim that the differences in genes led to the differences among people.
On the other hand, I believe that the effects of the environment like our lifestyle, family condition and life and job experience on our personality and achievements are inevitable. When you live with positive and happy people, they would affect you in a positive way. If you endure difficult situations for long period of time, it would turn you to a strong person because your mind and body learn to adapt to the environment, which changes your thinking, behaviour and personality. If a twin are separated at birth and each of them lives with different family, although they have similar genetic characters, they will not show the same personality traits.
In conclusion, while genes affect some parts of your personality, I think where and how you live, what you mainly do and people with whom you are talking have a great effect on your personality and achievements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, well, while, i think, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94035087719 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90722452651 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5810810378 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.333333333 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332435063123 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111106116584 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875185885828 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191684883381 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512579739481 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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