Shopping has become a new favorite pastime for younger generations. Why is this the case? Should we encourage them to develop other hobbies too?
It must be admitted that young individuals are giving more preference to shopping during their leisure time. This is mainly due to excess disposable income and peer pressure to follow the latest trend. If questioned, I certainly agree that young people should be motivated to develop other hobbies which can keep them healthy and stress-free.
Discussing the reasons why young people are inclined to shop during their leisure time. The first and most compelling reason is young people have enough money to spend on such activities. In other words, many jobs are offering youth high salaries and they do not have any responsibility or concern to save for the future. Therefore, they spend on shopping for vivid products without giving a second thought. Another reason is young people are easily influenced by their friends who might be doing window shopping almost every week. For instance, according to a survey conducted by SurveyMoney.com on VR Business mall in Surat, most of the sales of the mall comes from youths who have recently started their career.
Having said that, some people argue that young people should be encouraged to spend their free time in more better and useful ways. I certainly agree with the statement and think that young people should indulge their free time in some physical activities such as sports or games instead of spending time in malls. This will help them to be fit and healthy. Young individuals can also join classes that will enable them to enhance their skills which will aid them to better career prospects. For example, those people in the software field can join Artifical intelligence which is growing very fast in today's market.
In conclusion, while it is true that young people are attracted to frequent shopping these days, they should be encouraged to spend time wisely on activities that will help them to lead a more comfortable and healthy life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05362776025 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48271597922 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555205047319 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4232912412 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.8 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145437679164 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056461598948 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385913783914 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101861986022 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216890276481 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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