some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.
One of the crucial human resources in any country is youth, whom we should develop well. Some countries see the benefits of teenagers getting part-time jobs, while others refuse that. I am going to discuss both views and give my opinion on the conclusion.
No one can ignore the importance of education for teenagers in our communities. During this stage of life, teenage, they are learning lots of science that will help them improve their qualifications and knowledge. Having a part-time job will not give them the opportunity to focus more on their studies, which will be reflected in their educational level. Instead, they can participate in any of the community services in their schools or universities which will promote their development.
In addition to that, having a part-time job will consume their whole time which will give them fewer chances to enjoy their life and pursuing their hobbies, which is important for6 improving their personal skills.
However, the job market became more competitive and the requirements for more experienced and skilled candidates got increased. Since the majority of schools and universities are focusing only on teaching students the theoretical concepts and not focusing more on the vocational training, it is important for teenagers to focus more on their practical life by getting part-time jobs which qualify them for the job market.
Moreover, having a job means earning money, which will help them affording their studies' fees and make some savings for the future. For example, in some countries like USA and Canada, the tuition fee will get covered by the government until university, which pushes students to start looking for a source of income to cover their studies cost.
In conclusion, although, the importance for teenagers to focus more on their studies and enjoy their free time by pursuing their hobbies, I believe that it is also beneficial for them to develop their practical skills by having a part-time job to fulfil the job markets' demands.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 66, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to afford' or 'afford'.
Suggestion: to afford; afford
...ans earning money, which will help them affording their studies fees and make some saving...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19266055046 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70764325666 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516819571865 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.2732620628 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.615384615 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195016643113 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887122749155 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084894226514 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127231822545 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773299912434 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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