In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for the government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
It is true that the number of people that suffer from medical issues keeps going up. This is mainly due to over-consumption of fast food. As a result of this, there have been debates on whether the government should increase the tax on fast food. I am in full support of this idea because people will control the rate at which they take such food and the government will have more funds to be used in the health sector.
When people find fast food more expensive as a result of the higher tax, they will be forced to control what they eat and they will eat balanced diets which are mostly not taxed. Although some people argue that they usually consume snacks because they are always too busy to cook, I think the high cost of fast food will make people eat less of it despite their tight schedule. In other words, the increase in prices of snacks will obviously initiate the consciousness of "eating good" in many people's mind, they will adjust and eat alternative food even when they are quite busy. They can eat fruits, vegetables and home-made food more which are beneficial to their health. This consciousness will help them prevent sicknesses such as diabetes, cancer and hypertension.
In addition, once these diseases reduce, the amount government spends on sicknesses will drop, there will be more money to spend in the health sector. While I admit that it is not the government's responsibility to control what people eat – like some people say, raising fast food tax will be beneficial to everyone at the end of the day. This is because there will be more fund for better health facilities, training of health personnel, the availability of free vaccines for children and most people will be healthier. This is a win-win situation and should be encouraged.
In conclusion, even though it seems some people might not want the tax raised, I totally agree that fast food should be taxed heavily so as to prevent many deadly diseases and provide adequately for everybody's health need. Prevention is better than cure, also, the health of the people is the nation's health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, while, as to, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80110497238 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53460527988 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491712707182 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8629541578 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.866666667 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293776570189 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119185565387 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623310805037 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202823661868 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421865350611 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 50.2224549098 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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