In some countries people of all ages place extra emphasis on sports and exercising. Do you think it is a positive development? Give your opinion and relevant examples from your own experience.
In many countries, governments put extra emphasis on sports activities due to various benefits it brings to its citizens. I believe, such developments have more positive outcomes than negative. Therefore, in my opinion, this should be considered as an advantageous move and should be promoted across people of all ages.
Firstly, those countries where the majority of people are indulging in sports or physical activity are found healthier and fit compared to people of other nations. For instance, many people in Australia are making their living through sports, and in recent survey Australian found more physically fit than people of other countries. Moreover, Australia is shining worldwide due to the performance and tough competition, they have given in the Olympics and bagged many medals in various sports fields such as swimming, gymnastics, cycling and running and produced assets in the country. As a result, enthusiasm towards sports benefiting Australian to a larger extent. In addition, people who are sports fan bond well regardless of their race, ethnicity and nations which minimizes discrimination. Another reward of sports is, it helps to release stress and anxiety and make people more productive at the workplace. Thus, such enormous advantages by being active in sports activities could bring proud moments for countries
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On the contrary, there are few challenges which countries have to face while putting extra attention on sports and exercise. Firstly, hefty amount of money is being spend to arrange sports facilities or to build a gym, which could be redirected on more essential issues. Eventually, many believe that countries should rather focus to provide basic facilities to their citizens instead of providing luxury of sports to few desired ones. Furthermore, sportsmen have to retire earlier in their carrier compared to other occupation as with age their potential is being questioned.
To conclude, it’s aptly said that "health is wealth" and by providing a substantial platform to achieve fitness and learn sports, countries are doing tremendous work for their citizens. Therefore, I believe, advantages of this development outweigh its drawbacks, hence, countries without worry should focus to improve the existing facilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, moreover, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56733524355 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88615131061 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581661891117 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6130848449 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.4375 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157969736533 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540113476218 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0237582902301 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961671425929 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029013164095 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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