In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

In the modern era of education and development, adolescents in certain countries are encouraged to work or travel for a year between completing secondary education and beginning tertiary education. This trend comprises of both positive and negative aspects. In this essay, we will discuss the merits and demerits for the young lads who decide on this.

First and foremost, students travelling for work before higher education instils global exposure and connectivity. Secondly, they get to witness a wide variety of cultural differences. Thirdly, the individuals obtain the opportunity to learn about the work culture beforehand which is a benefit for them at a later stage. For instance, it is believed that candidates who have prior work experience knowledge tend to perform well at workplace after acquiring jobs. This shows that it is beneficial for students to travel for work before the start of their university education.

Although there are positive aspects to this, travelling for work to a new different place induces a sense of loneliness and they may acquire certain influences that might be harmful to them. This can apply to both introverts and extroverts. If the students do not have a moral support to guide them, they are forced to become aloof. They get a feel of isolation in such new environments. In order to get rid of such loneliness and isolation, they may get addicted to bad influences. To give a clear example, we get to hear about many news information on students who get addicted to harmful habits and end their lives due to that. This proves that young people become isolated and get used to unnecessary habits that are not favourable to them when introduced to a new environment.

With the above aspects considered, it is evident that working before starting their university education provides both advantages as well as disadvantages. Therefore, it is necessary to outweigh the benefits against the drawbacks carefully before taking a wise decision.

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Average: 8.2 (18 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
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Suggestion: much; little
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...sity education provides both advantages as well as disadvantages. Therefore, it is necessa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, for instance, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.173374613 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90723778766 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560371517028 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4877383984 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2941176471 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297114543817 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855691999439 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852984092664 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173887494553 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932806634627 0.056905535591 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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