Some governments spend a lot of public money training up individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In a wide range of well-developed countries these days, the government tend to allocate budgets of the considerable amount in order to prepare talented athletes for international sport’s competitions such as Olympics. This trend prompts a controversial topic of whether or not these expenses should be utilized for other purposes that meet general interests. I subscribe to the idea that it is absolutely imperative for a nation to be prosperous in overseas sport’s events in order to preserve the sense of patriotism among its members and also, to motivate its young sport enthusiastic individuals.
Nothing would stimulate and trigger the feeling of proudness in a nation than achieving international sport’s awards and medals. Considering the fact that athletes present their whole nation outside their country’s borders, when a national team or a sportsman or woman manage to defeat their competitors, this would generate a wave of contentment and happiness among their local community. Accordingly, this is extremely essential for governments to prepare the grounds of prosperity for their athletes, since otherwise, the country would lose face and this would result in general grief.
More importantly, governmental funding for international sport’s competitions can ultimately pave the way of attracting youngsters into pursuing an athletic career. In doing so, not only the crime rate among younger individuals would dramatically drop, but also the general health would ameliorate. This means the young generation would have the ammunition to create a relatively more stable society. Considering Sweden as an example, a recent survey by World Health Organization (WHO) demonstrates that the key factors contributing to the high quality of life have grown up to 20 percent since 2010. This study implies that this increase has happened simultaneously with the enlargement of governmental sport’s founding and at the end, it concludes that these two happenings are in a close correlation.
Taken together, I firmly hold the view that it is absolutely essential for a nation to be able to gain various international sport’s achievements. For that purpose, compatible state money should be dedicated to training sportsmen and women in the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
...ther, I firmly hold the view that it is absolutely essential for a nation to be able to gain various...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, so, thus, well, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61271676301 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29009399569 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595375722543 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.0562996644 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.384615385 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6153846154 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147383869112 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058380103508 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378812435543 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998957705522 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392695065197 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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