Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?
In this modern era, there is an ongoing deliberation among people on the ways in which children can spend their free time. While some people argue that this time should be used to do more school work, on my point of view, I strongly disagree with this argument. In this essay, I shall discuss on the factors strengthening my argument while analyzing both sides of it.
First and foremost, there are myriad of effective ways in using free time such as extra curricular activities. For instance, students can be sent to dancing, music or art classes’ during their free time which would enable to enhance their skills and even they can select entertainment business as their profession. In addition, parents can direct their children to engage in sports because it will help to gain physical stability together with mental stability. Involvement in sporting events could reduce the risk of diseases such as diabetes, cholestarole and etc.
On the other hand, parents can encourage students for religious activities because it would direct them in correct path in their present and future life as well. Apart from that, parents can take their children on travelling. This would add experiences to life and knowledge as well. Students can use this kowledge in studies and also in their normal life. Children should also be given time in watching television, films and internet as well.
In conclusion, it is recommended to give sufficient time to children to spend their leisure time enjoying around and getting exposure on the things around. It is also believed that parents should guide and facilitate students in using their leisure time in an effective manner. Finally, students should held responsible for effective utilization of their free time.
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... such as diabetes, cholestarole and etc. On the other hand, parents can encourage...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an effective manner" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...te students in using their leisure time in an effective manner. Finally, students should held responsi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, then, well, while, apart from, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14634146341 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65381737586 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557491289199 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7670997462 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4200902198 0.244688304435 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141496070889 0.084324248473 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106743183333 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261021573123 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889685383177 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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